This is what my work looks like with the two revised pieces. While they still both stand out they fit in with the rest of the pieces better than the originals.
Unfortunately when I took this piece down from the exhibition I neglected to take the blue tack off the back of the pieces and they stuck together. Whilst removing the blue tack I caused a lot of minor damage tp a lot of the pages that I'll probably have to go back over and rectify.

I've also been thinking about how to better present the series of work since the exhibition. An obvious solution would be to get rid of the current format of presenting the work altogether and make the pieces into some sort of book either with or without the original text I drew from (siren's of titan).
I also thought of adapting my current way of presenting the work by instead of laying the pages out as a sort of square, laying them out n one long line. This was awkward to photo so I tried filming the line to try and recreate the look. I prefer this layout to the original as I feel I have enough pages to get the maximum affect from having a line of work whereas before the work seemed underwhelming and like it should be bigger. It still doesn't have the effect I aimed for when I started this project but at least it's closer to it than the original  layout.